Below are the comments I posted on my thinking/writing members post:
Willie,
I thought you listed some good insights from the guest speaker that you could have talked about further. I liked how in your first paragraph you connected with some of the things the speaker said when your grandfather died. However, the assignment was to write three paragraphs addressing the insights you got from the speaker and your own thoughts /connections regarding them. I definitely think you could have expanded on your thoughts and made further connections by writing more about your experiences with illness or death. You were off to a good start.
Brandon,
I though that this was a good post, but it could have been better. I would just suggest that you proofread your post before posting like in the second paragraph, the last couple of sentences i noticed a few spelling mistakes.
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